Friday 26 August 2016

Olympic moment in time





 


we are learning to describe a moment in time in detail


I do running in the olympics and got 3 gold medals. I represent Jamaica and I do sprinting and I ran in the 200 metres race. 3 2 1 go the race started I could hear the crowd cheering and see loads  of people watching. I heard the announcer  said i came first in  the race. I wondered how much races i,d race and i was wondering if my family was watching .


4 comments:

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  2. Hi Jayden,
    I really like the way you explained it clearly.
    (next step) Can you use and a we bit less in your sentences.

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  3. Hello it is Sophie from Paproa Range School and I have been looking at your blog and what you have been posting on it this is my favorite one because you have changed your names that would of been Usan Bolt to I.
    Your next step would properly be to make your title bigger than your writing in your paragraph.

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  4. Hello it is Sophie from Paproa Range School and I have been looking at your blog and what you have been posting on it this is my favorite one because you have changed your names that would of been Usan Bolt to I.
    Your next step would properly be to make your title bigger than your writing in your paragraph.

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